Krugar- Chapter 1

It was early morning, and Kruger National Park lay in hushed stillness. Dew sparkled on the tall grasses, catching the faintest light as the horizon slowly brightened. A lingering chill clung to the air, a fleeting mercy before the sun would rise fully and turn the landscape into an inferno—pure African hell on earth.

Ezekiel "Zeke" Mokoena, a park conservationist, set out on his morning patrol, his truck rumbling softly over the dirt road. He rolled down the window, letting the crisp air flood in as he unzipped his coat. With his free hand, he flicked open a lighter, igniting a menthol cigarette. The familiar burn of mint mixed with the damp scent of wild grass and earth, grounding him. He took a deep drag and exhaled, feeling at peace, exactly where he was meant to be.

The usual morning sounds filled the air—birds chirping, distant hyenas cackling, and, somewhere in the distance, the deep-throated roars of lions announcing the dawn. The sound always sent a shiver down his spine, a primal reminder of the raw power that ruled these lands.

Then, something different.

A cry. A whimper.

Zeke froze. That was a lion, no doubt. But not a call of dominance. It was a sound of agony.

He slowed the truck to a crawl, scanning the tree line ahead. Something wasn’t right. A scream tore through the silence, the sheer pain in the roar making his stomach tighten.

He veered off the path, parking roughly fifty paces from the dense bush. Killing the engine, he listened. The morning had shifted—the birds had gone quiet, the usual rhythm of the wild disrupted.

Zeke stepped out. The earth was cold beneath his boots.

Another roar—louder, raw with suffering.

His breath hitched. What the hell is going on?

A burst of static crackled from the radio clipped to his belt.

“Zeke, what’s your position?” a voice asked, tense.

Before he could answer, the voice continued.

“We need you in the valley. Now.”

Zeke hesitated, glancing toward the thick brush where the lion’s cries echoed. Something was suffering in there. Something big. But something was also waiting in the valley.

His grip tightened around the radio.

"Copy that," he muttered.

And then, one last, gut-wrenching roar filled the morning air.

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The cries grew louder. Then, just as suddenly, they stopped.

Zeke pushed through the thick African brush, the sharp twigs scraping against his arms as he moved. His heart pounded. The silence was heavier now, thick with something unspoken. Too quiet.

Then he saw it.

A massive lion, sprawled in the dirt, its golden coat soaked in blood. Torn flesh, deep gashes. The beast’s heaving sides rose and fell in ragged, painful breaths.

Zeke’s gut twisted. What the hell did this?

Then his eyes locked onto the real horror.

Strands of razor wire wrapped tight around the lion’s body, biting deep into its flesh. The more it had struggled, the deeper the blades had driven in. The ground was torn up around it, evidence of its desperate fight.

Zeke swallowed hard. Jesus Christ.

His breath came in short bursts as realization settled in. The marshland traps.

His fists clenched. He’d heard about them before—illegal poachers setting up razor-wire snares, designed to kill or cripple anything that wandered into their path. But seeing it like this—this brutal, merciless suffering—it was different.

He shook his head in disbelief. I can’t believe it.

The lion’s glassy eyes flickered toward him, its body too weak to fight anymore. The king of the savanna, brought down not by nature, not by another predator—but by greed.

Zeke exhaled, steadying himself. No time to hesitate.

He reached for his radio.

“HQ, this is Zeke.” His voice was tight, controlled. “I need immediate backup. We’ve got a lion caught in a razor-wire snare. It’s bad.”

Silence crackled on the other end. Then, a reply.

“Understood. Hold tight.”

But Zeke wasn’t sure how much time the lion had left.

And he wasn’t sure if whoever set this trap was still watching.

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Zeke dropped a bright orange stake near his feet—a marker. No way in hell was he losing his way out here. Africa was one of those places where you could get turned around in an instant, lose sight of your truck just ten feet away, and never find it again.

He took a deep breath, scanning his surroundings. Thick brush. Golden grass. A sky that stretched endlessly overhead. And silence—unnerving, heavy silence.

Then, he ran.

Back at the truck, he yanked open the door and grabbed what he needed—wire snips, bolt cutters, a med kit. His hands were steady, but his pulse hammered in his ears. This could be suicide.

But he couldn’t just leave the lion to suffer.

Whether it was instinct, duty, or just pure rage at the ones responsible, he wasn’t sure. Maybe this was the only way he could fight back against them.

Because this? This had marshland poachers written all over it.

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Zeke made his way back toward the lion, pushing through the brush, when—damn it.

He stopped. Turned. His pulse spiked.

For a second, he’d lost his bearings. Stupid. He cursed himself under his breath, frustration bubbling up. Africa was like that—turn your head the wrong way, and the land swallows you whole.

Then, the lion made a sound.

Not a purr. Not a roar.

Agony.

It was the sound of life leaving a body.

Zeke clenched his jaw. He knew the risk—he’d been calling for trouble long before he even got here. If this lion had a pride nearby, they’d tear him apart. If it was a bachelor, it could still have brothers. Either way, he wasn’t alone out here.

But none of that mattered.

Because when he looked at the lion—really looked at him—he saw it. That desperate, pleading gaze.

Help was coming. But right now, the only help this lion had was Zeke.

He spotted the orange stake he’d dropped earlier—his marker.

And then, he saw it again. That massive body, sprawled out in pain. No matter how many times you saw a lion up close, there were no words to truly describe what five hundred and fifty pounds of raw muscle and power looked like, stripped of its strength.

The smell hit him next.

The thick iron tang of blood. The raw, torn flesh. The acrid bite of urine.

It was the smell of a big cat. You know it when you smell it. And you never forget it.

Zeke knelt beside the lion, his breath steady but his hands tense. This close, the size of the animal was staggering. The rise and fall of its chest was rapid, uneven.

Before he cut the wire, he placed a hand on the lion’s massive body.

Thump-thump-thump-thump.

The heartbeat beneath his palm was wild—easily 200 beats a minute. Panic. Pain. Fear.

Zeke swallowed. He knew that feeling all too well.

“Hey there, Mista Lion,” he murmured, his voice low, steady. He didn’t know why he was talking, only that it felt right.

“How you? Hm?” His words came out in his broken African English, half instinct, half comfort. “I’m not here to hurt you. Don’t worry, huh?”

His fingers tightened around the bolt cutters.

“It gon’ be alright.”

The lion’s ribs expanded in another shaky breath. Maybe he understood. Maybe he didn’t.

But Zeke was all he had.

And he was going to save him.

Zeke positioned the bolt cutters carefully, his hands steady despite the adrenaline surging through him. One wrong move, and he could make it worse.

He took a deep breath and squeezed the handles.

Snip.

The first wire snapped.

A shudder rippled through the lion’s massive body. The tension in the wire eased—just a little—but enough.

Enough for the lion’s eyes to shift, locking onto Zeke.

Desperation.

Fear.

And something else.

Hope.

“Please,” Zeke whispered. “Plees.”

He wasn’t sure if he was talking to the lion or to whatever god might be listening.

Snip.

A tremble ran through the beast. A fraction of relief.

Snip.

A little more.

He kept going. One cut at a time. One breath at a time.

Because right now, that was all either of them had.

Snip.

Zeke’s breath caught as the last few strands of wire loosened. But then he saw it—the worst of it.

A thick coil of razor wire was wrapped tight around the lion’s shoulder, so deep it had disappeared into the flesh. Dried blood clotted the fur, but fresh rivulets ran down the lion’s golden coat, pooling in the dirt.

Zeke exhaled sharply. Damn it.

Cutting that wire would set the lion free, but it would also pull back with force, ripping deeper before it let go. More pain. A lot more. The last thing he wanted was to cause the animal excruciating agony in the very moment of its freedom.

But then again…

Even if Zeke freed him, the lion wasn’t going anywhere anytime soon. He was too weak, too torn up.

Then—he heard it.

The last sound in the world he wanted to hear.

“Whoooooop.”

Zeke’s blood ran cold.

He looked up.

Then, again—“Whooooooop.”

No.

His chest tightened. His grip on the bolt cutters went white-knuckle.

Hyenas.

And they were close.

Zeke looked down.

The lion’s eyes were locked onto his, unblinking, full of something deeper than just pain. Trust? Desperation? A silent plea?

He tightened his grip on the bolt cutters, trying to steady his hands. Focus. Just one more cut.

“Whoooooop.”

Zeke’s stomach clenched.

Movement.

A hyena’s head popped up from the brush, its beady eyes glinting, its body bobbing with that eerie, unnatural rhythm. Its tail was high—aggressive.

Zeke’s breath came slow and controlled, but his body was electric, every nerve on edge.

I’ve come this far.

There was no more time to hesitate.

The hyena was ten meters away, maybe less. Zeke made his choice.

Snip.

The last wire snapped, whipping free as the tension released. The lion groaned—a deep, guttural sound of unbearable pain.

And then—

A roar.

But not from the lion Zeke had freed.

From the other side of the bush, a second male lion exploded into view.

A blur of golden muscle and fury.

Before the matriarch of the hyena clan could react, the lion was on her, slamming her into the dirt. Dust shot into the air as the two bodies clashed. Then—jaws clamped down.

The lion’s teeth sank into the hyena’s throat.

Zeke barely breathed.

Everything slowed.

The lion’s amber eyes locked onto him—staring straight into his soul.

Zeke didn’t move. He didn’t even blink.

Behind him, the lion he had freed shifted, trying to rise, but his body was too weak. He let out a breath and slumped back down.

Zeke reached out, placing his hand on the lion’s body, feeling the slow, steady rise and fall of its ribs.

“Now, now, my guy,” he murmured. “Just relax.”

The lion’s heartbeat had slowed.

Zeke hadn’t even noticed the sound of approaching boots, of voices shouting.

His fellow officers had arrived, rifles raised, aimed at the lion still gripping the hyena’s lifeless body.

But the lion didn’t attack.

Instead, he stared at Zeke.

And then, in a movement so deliberate it almost didn’t seem real, the lion gave the slightest nod.

A silent acknowledgment.

Then, he dropped the hyena, turned, and disappeared into the brush.

Help had arrived.

But Zeke had already done what he came to do.